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I followed you
up
my calf, over all the soft parts,
and let you settle in
the junkyard snarl in my lower back.
Now I can hear you wandering between
rusty refrigerators, trying not to
inhale;
the air is thick with old relationships
rotting. If you keep going,
there is an ancient Volvo in the back with good seats left.
I spent many nights there,
stretched out and staring at the sagging ceiling.
Peace,
It will keep you.

The last drifter had shorter legs;
I boosted her up frontways, and she burrowed into my belly
and burned. But the dragon in the middle
turned over
and over in its sleep,
I could hear its dreams restless in the junkyard.
She was safe and soft, but I drove her
out with icy mud, settled her on the air.
The dragon's walls hold me up
hold me--
She understands the danger in
ghosts and bellyquakes;
She moved on.

So walk quietly, beloved.
There are dragons between you
and soft tissue.
Make companions of iron and steel,
see, they hold, they keep me.
The dragon will know his own and
you are so small.
Look, I spread an empire for you
in the barbed wire. Stay,
I followed you
this far.
©2005-2009 ~completeaccident
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Author's Comments

Don't get me wrong, I don't even like this kind of love story. The unimpowered imagery drives me nuts. But there you have it, there's the geography of my guts.

This isn't a Valentine's Day poem, I swear. :P I kind of feel wonky about putting it up today. Or in general. I've been writing a lot of short-and-sweet, lately, and this is a return to an older style. I dunno. Bless whoever decided to name a car 'Volvo'.

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:iconinmyroom:
this is really powerful, the viewpoint is cool.. great concept.
:iconjelliclekitten:
This poem absolutely fascinates me. Well done.

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I love you too, ~houligan! :heart:
:iconcompleteaccident:
Fascinates, huh? :D Heh..! Thank you. :)
:iconbramwolf:
I love the imagry in this, it's really beautiful.
:iconcrystalcage:
Beautiful imagery, and play on words- i love how you created this whole new world for me, and still kept it lightly erotic- awesome piece!!!!!!!!!!

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"Would you be there, when the lights get shot out?!" CL
:iconmanchaliaina:
You made me write a poem. You always make me write a poem, you bum. I can see the geography. It's all gorgeous. I like the short legs and the boosting a lot. The first stanza is a little choppy to read for me - the lineation with the second like sets me up for a slightly off-balance read. I'm not sure if that's a problem, but it distracted. The rest of it is just gorgeous. Oh and the Volvo! Bless twice whoever invented the name. I really like the last stanza because I like the word 'beloved' and everything else swirls around it like it has a pleasantly compelling gravity.

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Don't you try and stop me, I cling tightly to this life.
- Neko Case
:iconcompleteaccident:
Making you write a poem is totally what I am all about. :D I'm really glad you like the short legs. I know what you mean about the lineation, too, but I think I'm married to it. It sounds right in my head-- Maybe I'll have to read it out loud to you sometime, and have you help me put what I hear onto paper. Or maybe I'll just set my toenails on fire and spare myself the suffering. The word beloved climbed in there while I was writing the second stanza, so it doesn't surprise me that you like it, and then once it was there the third stanza wrote itself. I'm a little bit pissy at it, because I had a very nice visual structure I was working with on the first two stanzas, and then the darn third one went and wrote itself without asking, but FINE. *throws up hands, then washes them*
:iconmoonduster:
Wow! Powerful imagery! Definitely a terrific poem! :D

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:iconhyacinthjen:
Reading this really was like being transported to another world- and I\'ve never quite heard of insides as junkyard quite this eloquently. :P I do agree that the first stanza was a little choppy to read, however. Still, I love the way the speaker seeems to have a quiet power- the words aren\'t in-your-face, yet defenitely command attention. :worship:

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